1.Late Night Intruder(395)

Sixth grade rewrite

Late Night Intruder

【1】Once upon a time in a dimly lit French hotel, Fowler found himself following Ausable down a corridor. Ausable didn't quite match the image of a secret agent that Fowler had in mind. His room on the sixth floor was small and unromantic.

【2】Firstly, Ausable was quite plump. Secondly, his accent still carried traces of New England, despite living in Paris for twenty years.

【3】"You seem disappointed," Ausable wheezed as they walked. "You expected espionage and danger, but instead, you got a mundane evening in a French music hall with a chubby man like me."

【4】"You're disillusioned," Ausable continued. "But don't worry, soon you'll witness something of great importance, something that could change history."

【5】As Ausable turned on the light in his room, Fowler's heart skipped a beat. Standing there was a slender man holding a small pistol.

【6】"Max!" Ausable exclaimed. "You startled me. What are you doing here?"

【7】Max, with a fox-like face, explained that he intended to take a report about new missiles from Ausable for safety reasons.

【8】Seated heavily, Ausable grumbled about the intruder, mentioning it wasn't the first time someone had entered through the balcony.

【9】Max, surprised, hadn't known about the balcony and confessed he used a passkey. Ausable explained the balcony belonged to the adjacent room, now vacant.

【10】Max gestured Fowler to sit as they awaited something for half an hour. Ausable lamented the delay, pondering how Max knew about the report.

【11】Max, with a sinister smile, mentioned retrieving the report tonight. Suddenly, there was a knock at the door.

【12】Ausable smiled, revealing he had called the police for extra protection. Max grew anxious.

【13】As the knocking persisted, Max threatened to shoot if the police weren't sent away. He backed toward the window, eventually escaping to the balcony with a scream.

【14】Just as the door opened, a waiter entered with a tray, delivering a drink Ausable had ordered.

【15】Shaken, Fowler asked about the police. Ausable confessed they were never called; it was just his friend Henry. As for the man on the balcony, Ausable assured Fowler he wouldn't return.

六年级改写

深夜闯入者

【1】从前，在一家灯光昏暗的法国旅馆里，福勒发现自己跟着奥萨博走过一条走廊。奥萨博并不完全符合福勒心目中的秘密特工形象。他在六楼的房间又小又不浪漫。

【2】首先，奥萨博很丰满。其次，尽管他在巴黎生活了二十年，但他的口音仍然带有新英格兰的痕迹。

【3】“你似乎很失望，”奥萨博一边走一边喘着气说。“你期待的是间谍活动和危险，但结果，你得到的是一个平凡的夜晚，在一个法国音乐厅和一个像我这样胖乎乎的男人在一起。”

【4】“你的幻想破灭了，”奥萨博继续说道。“但别担心，很快你就会看到一些非常重要的事情，一些可能改变历史的事情。”

【5】当奥萨博打开房间的灯时，福勒的心跳加快了。站在那里的是一个身材苗条的人，手里拿着一把小手枪。

【6】“麦克斯!”奥萨博惊呼道。“你吓了我一跳。你在这里做什么?”

【7】长着狐狸脸的麦克斯解释说，出于安全原因，他打算从奥萨博那里拿一份关于新型导弹的报告。

【8】奥萨博沉重地坐着，抱怨着闯入者，说这不是第一次有人从阳台进来了。

【9】麦克斯很吃惊，他不知道阳台的事，于是承认他用了一把钥匙。奥萨博解释说，阳台属于隔壁房间，现在空着。

【10】麦克斯做手势让福勒坐下，他们等了半个小时。奥萨博为这次耽搁感到惋惜，琢磨着麦克斯是怎么知道这份报告的。

【11】麦克斯带着阴险的微笑提到今晚取回报告。突然，有人敲门。

【12】奥萨博笑了笑，透露他已经打电话给警察寻求额外的保护。麦克斯变得焦虑起来。

【13】敲门声不断，麦克斯威胁说，如果不把警察赶走，他就要开枪。他向窗户退去，最后尖叫着逃到了阳台上。

【14】就在门打开的时候，一个侍者端着托盘进来了，送来了奥萨博点的饮料。

【15】福勒很震惊，他询问警察的情况。奥萨博承认从未给他们打过电话;只是他的朋友亨利。至于阳台上的那个人，奥萨博向福勒保证他不会再回来了。