4.The Man in the Water(377)

Sixth grade rewrite

The Man in the Water

【1】Once upon a time, there was a very sad event that happened in a city called Washington. It was a day when the weather was very cold, and a plane crashed into a bridge. This crash was not the worst in the history of the United States, but it was still very sad because people lost their lives.

【2】The story of this crash is not just about the crash itself, but also about the people who tried to help. There were heroes that day, and one of them was a man who was in the water. He was not a famous person, but he did something very brave. He helped other people who were also in the water to survive.

【3】This man was not alone in the water. There were other people with him, and they were all trying to stay alive. The man in the water was very strong and brave. He could have saved himself, but he chose to help others instead. He gave them the things they needed to stay alive, even though it meant he might not survive himself.

【4】The man in the water was like a hero from a storybook. He showed us that even when things are very bad, people can still be kind and brave. He reminded us that everyone has the power to help others, and that is a very special power.

【5】The story of the man in the water is important because it shows us that we should always try to help each other, even when it's hard. It teaches us that being kind and brave can make a big difference in the world. And even though the man in the water did not survive, his story lives on and reminds us of the good in people.

【6】So, even though the crash was a very sad event, the story of the man in the water is a story of hope and kindness. It reminds us that we all have the power to make a difference, and that we should always try to help others, just like the man in the water did.

六年级改写

水里的人

【1】从前，在一个叫华盛顿的城市里发生了一件非常悲伤的事情。那天天气很冷，一架飞机撞上了一座桥。这次坠机并不是美国历史上最严重的一次，但它仍然非常令人悲伤，因为人们失去了生命。

【2】这次坠机的故事不仅仅是关于坠机本身，还包括那些试图伸出援手的人。那天出现了英雄，其中一个是在水里的人。他不是一个有名的人，但他做了一件非常勇敢的事。他帮助其他在水里的人活了下来。

【3】在水里的不止这个人。还有其他人和他在一起，他们都在努力活下去。水里的那个人非常强壮和勇敢。他本可以自救，但他却选择了帮助别人。他给了他们生存所需要的东西，即使这意味着他自己可能活不下来。

【4】水里的那个人就像故事书里的英雄。他告诉我们，即使在情况非常糟糕的时候，人们仍然可以善良和勇敢。他提醒我们，每个人都有帮助别人的能力，这是一种非常特殊的能力。

【5】水里的人的故事很重要，因为它告诉我们，我们应该总是努力互相帮助，即使在困难的时候。它告诉我们，善良和勇敢可以给世界带来很大的不同。尽管那个在水里的人没能活下来，他的故事却流传了下来，让我们想起人性的善良。

【6】因此，尽管坠机是一件非常悲伤的事件，但这个落水男子的故事是一个充满希望和善良的故事。它提醒我们，我们都有能力做出改变，我们应该总是努力帮助别人，就像那个在水里的人一样。