4.Clearing in the Sky(472)

Sixth grade rewrite

Clearing in the Sky

【1】Once upon a time, there was a boy named Jesse who lived with his father in a beautiful countryside. His father was a strong and wise man who loved the land. One day, Jesse's father said, "Come with me, Jesse. I want to show you something special."

【2】Jesse was a bit tired from walking up a hill to his father's house, but he knew he couldn't say no to his father. They walked through a field of green grass and trees, and his father stopped to pick a piece of grass. "Look at this, Jesse! Isn't it beautiful?" he said proudly.

【3】Jesse's father told him how he had worked hard to make the land grow good crops. He had cleared the land of trees and bushes and had planted seeds that grew into corn, wheat, and potatoes. Jesse remembered helping his father when he was younger, but he didn't understand why his father was showing him this now.

【4】They walked up a steep path to the top of a mountain. Jesse's father was breathing heavily, but he kept going. "I want to show you something," he said. They reached a small clearing in the middle of the woods. "This is my special place," his father said.

【5】Jesse looked around and saw a small garden with tomatoes, yams, and potatoes. "This is where I grow my vegetables," his father explained. "They taste better because they are grown in new soil."

【6】Jesse was surprised. "But why did you make this garden here?" he asked. His father smiled and said, "I wanted to come back to the place where your mother and I started our life together. I wanted to feel young again."

【7】Jesse's father had been sick, and the doctors had told him to rest. But he couldn't sit still. He needed to work and feel the soil under his hands. He had made different paths up the mountain, each one a bit steeper than the last. "It was a way for me to know I was getting better," he said.

【8】Jesse understood that his father's garden was more than just a place to grow vegetables. It was a place of memories and love. It was a place where his father could feel alive and strong. Jesse was proud of his father and the legacy he was leaving behind.

【9】As they walked back down the mountain, Jesse knew that he would always remember this special day with his father. It was a day filled with love, hard work, and the beauty of nature. And he knew that no matter what happened, he would always carry his father's spirit with him.

六年级改写

天空晴朗

【1】从前，有个男孩叫杰西，他和父亲住在一个美丽的乡村。他的父亲是一个强壮而聪明的人，他热爱这片土地。一天，杰西的父亲说:“跟我来，杰西。我想给你看点特别的东西。”

【2】杰西爬上山去他父亲家，有点累，但他知道他不能拒绝他的父亲。他们走过一片绿油油的草地和树木，他的父亲停下来摘了一片草。“看这个，杰西!”它是不是很漂亮?”他自豪地说。

【3】杰西的父亲告诉他他是如何努力工作使土地长出好庄稼的。他清除了土地上的树木和灌木丛，种下了长成玉米、小麦和土豆的种子。杰西记得小时候帮助过父亲，但他不明白为什么父亲现在给他看这个。

【4】他们沿着一条陡峭的小路走到山顶。杰西的父亲喘着粗气，但他还在继续。“我想给你看样东西，”他说。他们来到了树林中间的一小块空地。“这是我特别的地方，”他的父亲说。

【5】杰西环顾四周，看到一个种着西红柿、山药和土豆的小花园。“这是我种蔬菜的地方，”他的父亲解释说。“它们的味道更好，因为它们生长在新的土壤里。”

【6】杰西很吃惊。“但你为什么要在这里建这个花园呢?”他问道。他的父亲笑着说:“我想回到我和你妈妈开始我们共同生活的地方。我想找回年轻的感觉。”

【7】杰西的父亲病了，医生让他休息。但他坐不住了。他需要工作，需要感受脚下的土壤。他走了好几条上山的路，一条比一条陡。“这是我知道自己正在好转的一种方式，”他说。

【8】杰西明白他父亲的花园不仅仅是一个种植蔬菜的地方。那是一个充满回忆和爱的地方。在那里，他的父亲可以感受到自己的活力和力量。杰西为他的父亲和他留下的遗产感到骄傲。

【9】当他们走下山的时候，杰西知道他会永远记住和父亲在一起的这特别的一天。这是充满爱、辛勤工作和大自然美景的一天。他知道，无论发生什么，他都会永远带着父亲的精神。