2.The Boy and the Bank Officer(505)

Sixth grade rewrite

The Boy and the Bank Officer

【1】I have a friend who really doesn't like banks. He says, "A bank is just like a store, but instead of selling candy or groceries, it sells money, which is yours to begin with. If banks had to sell wallets and money belts, they might not act so much like churches."

【2】The other day, I went to a small bank to open a checking account. It was lunchtime, and there was only one officer on duty. He was a man in his forties, with neat hair and a brown suit. He looked very professional.

【3】There was also a young boy there, who looked like he was from a good school, not a typical customer at this bank. He was holding a savings book and looked very upset. "I don't understand," he said to the officer. "I opened the account myself, so why can't I take out my money?"

【4】The officer explained that a fourteen-year-old can't withdraw money without a letter from their parents. The boy said, "But that's not fair. It's my money, I put it in, it's my account."

【5】The officer said, "I know, but those are the rules. Now, can I help you?" I said, "I was going to open a new account, but after seeing this, I've changed my mind."

【6】The officer was surprised. I explained that it seemed unfair that the boy could put money in but not take it out. The officer said, "That's the bank's policy, and I have to follow it."

【7】The boy looked hopeful, but I was just as confused. I noticed his savings book had about $100 and some small deposits and withdrawals. I asked the boy if he had withdrawn money before, and he said yes.

【8】I asked the officer why the boy could withdraw money before but not now. The officer said the tellers didn't know the boy's age before, but now they did. I told the boy he was being cheated and should get his parents to come and protest.

【9】The boy looked sad and left the bank. The officer said I shouldn't have interfered. I was surprised and asked who was representing the boy's interests. The officer said, "The bank."

【10】I couldn't believe it. I asked the officer to explain how the bank was representing the boy's interests. The officer said they found out that a bully had been forcing the boy to take out money every week and give it to him. The boy was too scared to tell anyone. The police are looking into it and might make an arrest today.

【11】I asked if there was really a rule about being too young to withdraw money. The officer said he had never heard of such a rule. Then he asked if he could help me with anything else.

六年级改写

男孩和银行职员

【1】我有一个朋友非常不喜欢银行。他说:“银行就像一家商店，但它卖的不是糖果或杂货，而是钱，钱首先是你的。如果银行不得不出售钱包和钱带，它们可能不会像教堂那样行事。”

【2】前几天，我去一家小银行开一个支票账户。当时是午餐时间，值班的只有一名职员。他是一个四十多岁的男人，头发整齐，穿着棕色西装。他看起来很专业。

【3】那里还有一个小男孩，他看起来像是从一所好学校毕业的，而不是这家银行的典型客户。他手里拿着一本存折，看上去很不安。“我不明白，”他对职员说。“我自己开的账户，为什么不能取钱呢?”

【4】职员解释说，没有父母的信，14岁的孩子不能取钱。男孩说:“但这不公平。这是我的钱，我存进去了，这是我的账户。”

【5】职员说:“我知道，但这是规定。现在，我能帮你吗?”我说:“我本来要开一个新账户的，但看了这个，我改变主意了。”

【6】职员很吃惊。我解释说，这孩子可以把钱存进去却不能取出来，这似乎不公平。职员说:“这是银行的规定，我必须遵守。”

【7】那男孩看起来很有希望，但我同样感到困惑。我注意到他的存折上有大约100美元和一些小额存款和取款。我问那个男孩以前是否取过钱，他说取过。

【8】我问那个职员为什么这个男孩以前可以取钱，现在却不能。这位职员说，出纳员以前不知道这个男孩的年龄，但现在他们知道了。我告诉那个男孩，他被骗了，应该让他的父母来抗议。

【9】男孩看起来很伤心，离开了银行。职员说我不该干涉。我很惊讶，问谁代表男孩的利益。职员说:“银行。”

【10】我简直不敢相信。我请那位职员解释一下银行是如何代表这个男孩的利益的。这名职员说，他们发现有个恶霸一直强迫这个男孩每周拿出钱给他。男孩太害怕了，不敢告诉任何人。警方正在调查此事，今天可能会逮捕一个人。

【11】我问是否真的有关于年龄太小不能取钱的规定。职员说他从未听说过这样的规定。然后他问我还有什么需要帮助的。